[Bookstoprisoners] B2P general informational pamphlet

[Susan Porter Bruce]

Sara,
Nice job!  Some typos and rewordings I would suggest, in haste:

Mission column:

change book request letters to just "book requests"

to let prisoners know they ARE not forgotten

I would take off "in part" on second paragraph.

Contact us

Take off first two lines

Period after "messages"

Volunteer
Suggest "discuss HOW TO donate your skills."

Donate
"Typically...ADD SEMI-COLON 100 books; however, COMMA"

Suggest: "For large donations (five boxes or more), please..."

Projects
books in our collection that BEST SUIT

Add apostrophe: SHERIFF'S office

Suggest "our volunteers STAFF  the library each week and INTERACT"

I would change "once in a lifetime" to "unique."

Thanks for doing this.
Susan


On Nov 6, 2006, at 2:02 PM, sara ross wrote:

> Hi All, here's draft of the B2P general pamphlet. If you have  
> comments or suggestions, please e-mail me asap, as i'd like to make  
> mass copies of this tomorrow- to hand out for the sale. (plus i'm  
> going out of town on thurs. morn. so don't have much time after  
> wed. to work on it). After the sale, of course, we can continue to  
> edit and update.
> Sandra and Jay, let me know what you think of the changes under  
> "mission" and "projects". i just made up the text for part of it,  
> so need to know if this works for you/ the group at large.
> Thanks! Best, sarah ross
>
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